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Posted by: Krojar Aug 22 2011, 06:14 PM

Okay not 20 short stories...in fact just one for now. I'll be releasing a little bit of the story here and there. Usually a few hundred words a day. The first part of story #1 is up if you're interested. It deals with the young capa of Dona O'Malley's family who is in charge of Matrix operations.

http://shadowrunstories.blogspot.com/


Any and all feedback welcome. And yes, this is going to be in a "hard boiled" minimalist prose style. Sorry if it's not your cup of tea

Posted by: Angelone Aug 22 2011, 10:01 PM

Very nice, how often are you planning to update?

Edit- As far as feedback I'm liking the character so far.

Posted by: Dreadlord Aug 23 2011, 07:37 PM

Love it so far!

(now here comes Mr. Nitpick... On the seventh paragraph, after the quotes, the font changes. See below for text.)

Vicky couldn't see her girlfriend's face but she could picture the annoyed and petulant look on her fine elven features well enough.

Posted by: Krojar Aug 25 2011, 05:19 PM

Thanks for the note on the font change...obviously that was unintentional. A snafu when I was transferring the text from Word I guess.

I have half of #2 already written hopefuly I"ll have it up by tonight.

Posted by: Dreadlord Aug 25 2011, 10:22 PM

QUOTE (Krojar @ Aug 25 2011, 12:19 PM)

Posted by: Psikerlord Aug 26 2011, 10:48 AM

Yeah, good so far. I'm interested.

Posted by: Krojar Aug 27 2011, 01:15 PM

Okay posted #2. It was a little more rushed than the first so there may be some more errors in it. Also sorry about the font...blogger sucks.

Posted by: fazzamar Aug 28 2011, 02:54 PM

I like it thus far and looking forward to the future posts.

Posted by: Krojar Sep 2 2011, 06:30 PM

Sorry for the delay...been out of power since Sunday because of Irene. I did get a bit of writing done but it's been written the old fashioned way and needs to get put in digital form. Here's part 3

Posted by: Dreadlord Sep 12 2011, 02:48 PM

In part 1, next to last last paragraph, it is a Viper SLIVERgun, not a Silvergun. It shoots slivers, not precious metals (although the ammo cost FEELS like buying silver!).

Can't believe I missed it on first read, as one of my players actually pronounces it "Silvergun"!

(I am catching up from a long hiatus from the internet!)

Reading Part 2 next...

Posted by: Krojar Sep 13 2011, 02:09 AM

Sorry for the delay in the new update...work sucks. It will be coming soon!

Posted by: DMiller Sep 13 2011, 03:44 AM

Very nice. I juts read all three. Very nice indeed.

-D