QUOTE ( @ p.13)
her voice sounding like her lower job didn’t fit right with her upper jaw
Professionally proofread by MS Word.
QUOTE ( @ p.13)
They are Otsana Kovalenka’s people
So. Apparently, Otsana Kovalenko's name could be reconned. Now, why that resulted not in her name corrected to Oksana (which is a real Russian female name), but in her surname being changed the way some Ukrainians change theirs is beyond me. In Russia, both male and female Kovalenko would have just this surname, with an -o at the end.
QUOTE ( @ p.13)
Now that that was done, the next part was surviving the encounter with the Red Queen
I get the impression that title is meant to imply the second Queen in a chess set, other than the White one. Apparently, making the second set of pieces black, not red, as has been since times immemorial, has fallen out of favour in the last seventy years.
QUOTE ( @ p.13)
Judging by the beats resonating through the walls, they were in a nightclub
And Yuri did not know where that was, despite running with the gang for a while.
QUOTE ( @ p.14)
The Russian character was designed to deal with the Otsanas of this world. You stood and you waited. Maybe you died, maybe not. If not, there would be vodka later, and that was that.
Really now?
QUOTE ( @ p.14)
He had once again talked when not being spoken to.
Not that the previous question could only have been addressed to him.
QUOTE ( @ p.14)
We have a disk. From the Wolf King himself
Who?
QUOTE ( @ p.16)
Russian Red Army 3, Shapeshifters 4, Vladivostok Vory 3, Vladivostok 3
So a professional soldier from the Red Army knows it worse than the shapeshifters? Actually, he knows his erstwhile employers and his city worse!
QUOTE ( @ p.16)
SINner (Criminal, National (Russian Federation))
Russia is not a federation in Shadowrun timeline for all we know. Shadows of Asia calls it Russian Republic, the other books, for all I remember, just Russia.
QUOTE ( @ p.16)
Active Skills: Con 5
So how did Yuri win that opposed test and did not buy her bio?
Posted by: Fatum Sep 25 2013, 06:10 PM
Grognard rambling part 5
[ Spoiler ]
QUOTE ( @ RC p.87)
Every shapeshifter begins the game with a Magic attribute of 1
Why is the shapeshifter on p.17 Magic 0?
QUOTE ( @ p.18)
Gangrel ran afoul of the law and was offered a deal to join the Red Army or go to jail.
My, how the rules of conscription have changed. Not only is conscription non-common, apparently, like it is in all previously established fluff, they also take criminals in now! The legal system also changed from the current Roman one to include deals with the court, apparently.
Gangrel is said to from Yuri's unit, yet he has no Red Army knowledge whatsover. He too knows Yakut Awakened forces better than Vory and Otsana, though.
QUOTE ( @ p.19)
Clockwork Greyhound
Apparently has no weapons built in, not even teeth?
Posted by: Backgammon Sep 26 2013, 11:03 AM
Many valid point Fatum. Unfortunately I don't have the time I'd need to answer each point, so I'll just do what I can -
Vodka and Stalin: Another Russian reader actually had the same objection, and I explained my reasoning http://forums.shadowruntabletop.com/index.php?topic=12501.msg239118#new (starting at post #36)
Many Russian culture faux-pas: Apologies, I can't defend those. Those are all little things I simply didn't know, and it's not the kind of stuff some internet research will tell you (windows opening on hinges, people apparently don't say "I'm sorry" when someone is dead, etc). Regarding Kovalenka - my wife is Polish and I learned they did the o/a thing with their last name, and I incorrectly assumed it was the same for Russians. Again, I can only apologises for those kind of things.
Posted by: Fatum Sep 26 2013, 12:00 PM
I'll have to agree with Elektrycerze3 on this one: it does seem that everyone constantly drinks vodka, and nothing but vodka. Minding that statistically Russians drink thrice more beer and twice more cocktails than vodka, about as much wine as vodka, and again about as much cognac, tequila and other hard liquors, well, it does seem to be playing into the stereotype heavily.
For Stalin, I guess, you could argue that the authoritarian Russian government whitewashed his image, since they needed a strong authoritarian figure in the relatively recent past (so Ekaterina or Peter wouldn't work), but I kinda doubt it'd be done for the same reason it's not done today: it'd empower the communists.
As for the cultural realities, yeah, I guess nothing short of a Russian proofreader could help with some of those - but it's easily possible to find one on the net, or in RL if you're in a first world nation. On the other hand, well, it's not like the vast majority of the readers will notice.
Posted by: Sendaz Sep 26 2013, 12:57 PM
Что ни город, то норов, что ни деревня, то обычай.
Posted by: Tymeaus Jalynsfein Sep 26 2013, 02:23 PM
Exactly... Well said Sendaz...
Posted by: Angelone Sep 26 2013, 03:22 PM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XYEUJQ7zZNk
Posted by: Hamsnibit Sep 26 2013, 09:21 PM
I have to admit, this sounds quite bad.
Probably not as bad as slaughtering your way through the spirits of deceased victims in order to salvage a "necromantic artifact" biding its time in the apparently still standing Auschwitz camp as suggested in some ... other "sourcebook"
maybe ill take a look at this thing if i get my hands on it ...
Posted by: Backgammon Sep 26 2013, 10:37 PM
Well, certainly without saying Fatum doesn't have valid points, he may be a little exceptional in his attention to detail - he is writing a gargantuan book of Russia as a fan project, after all. Again, hes not wrong, but other reviews have focused more on what, admittedly, I focused on as well, which is the characters, the story, the flow, the mood. And those reviews have been pretty positive. So long as you don't know or dont care Russian windows open on hinges, you may walk away with a different opinion of the book.
Posted by: Angelone Sep 26 2013, 10:41 PM
I enjoyed it.
Posted by: Fatum Sep 27 2013, 01:53 AM
QUOTE (Hamsnibit @ Sep 27 2013, 01:21 AM)

Probably not as bad as slaughtering your way through the spirits of deceased victims in order to salvage a "necromantic artifact" biding its time in the apparently still standing Auschwitz camp as suggested in some ... other "sourcebook"
On a wholly different scale not as bad.
QUOTE (Backgammon @ Sep 27 2013, 02:37 AM)

Well, certainly without saying Fatum doesn't have valid points, he may be a little exceptional in his attention to detail - he is writing a gargantuan book of Russia as a fan project, after all. Again, hes not wrong, but other reviews have focused more on what, admittedly, I focused on as well, which is the characters, the story, the flow, the mood. And those reviews have been pretty positive. So long as you don't know or dont care Russian windows open on hinges, you may walk away with a different opinion of the book.
Basically, this. There are a couple inconsistencies that I've pointed out, but they don't affect the flow of the story, and anything not featuring uberpowered runners slaughtering their way through whatever they couldn't outthink is preciously rare.
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