 Reign of the Gun, Shadowrun fiction |
 May 6 2004, 07:28 AM
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Okay this is a story I wrote. I'd like commentary.Its long. Sorry.
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Paul Reign of the Gun May 6 2004, 07:28 AM
Paul The City Master was lit by the faint glow of LEDs ... May 6 2004, 07:30 AM tjn Couple things I see
First the term "bad guy... May 6 2004, 10:39 AM Paul No I appreciate the comments-thats exactly what I ... May 6 2004, 08:42 PM Erebus I liked it. Now, normally I'm not one for ... May 6 2004, 08:48 PM 3278 Thanks for the comments, both of you. This is very... May 6 2004, 09:06 PM tjn Ahh, does the series feature the same characters? ... May 6 2004, 09:51 PM Nikoli I just have one question,
Why is the LT also the ... May 6 2004, 11:23 PM Diesel *cough* A PAC? You my friend, are insane.
Mayb... May 6 2004, 11:47 PM Shadow I won't comment on the weapons, except to say ... May 6 2004, 11:57 PM Austere Emancipator I don't know shit about literature, so I'l... May 7 2004, 12:21 AM Paul On my way out to work, have read all comments, wil... May 7 2004, 12:30 AM Entropy Kid Starting out by saying I know nothing about SWAT t... May 7 2004, 01:10 AM Austere Emancipator QUOTE (Entropy Kid)The rotating barrels are loud e... May 7 2004, 01:30 AM Nikoli The dead guys are in cuffs because shapeshifter ha... May 7 2004, 02:15 AM kevyn668 I thought it was great. Far, far better than the v... May 7 2004, 03:48 AM Arethusa Paul, do you want criticism as a serious piece of ... May 7 2004, 06:16 AM Entropy Kid QUOTE @Entropy: There were no spirits or mages. Bu... May 7 2004, 09:43 AM Paul I am willing to entertain all levels of criticism.... May 7 2004, 11:42 AM toturi QUOTE Even with her eyes closed Gordon could tell... May 7 2004, 11:51 AM Austere Emancipator Random stuff as it comes to mind:
You use "cl... May 7 2004, 12:56 PM Paul QUOTE (tjn)
These replies aren't ne... May 9 2004, 01:11 PM kevyn668 I'll bite: what's "TRAVEL"? May 10 2004, 04:09 AM Kagetenshi Haven't read the other comments, so I may be r... May 10 2004, 05:23 AM Paul QUOTE ("kevyn668")I'll bite: what... May 10 2004, 01:45 PM toturi What was that spell the mage used to hit the werew... May 10 2004, 02:02 PM Paul I'm not ducking you really. 3278 handles that ... May 13 2004, 05:51 AM toturi Excuse me? I'm perfectly fine with GM fiat spe... May 13 2004, 10:43 AM tisoz A couple things that have not been mentioned. The... May 14 2004, 06:07 AM Entropy Kid QUOTE (Sure we know they are shapeshifters, but ev... May 14 2004, 07:15 AM
Austere Emancipator tisoz: Load Bearing Vest (and Load Bearing Equipme... May 14 2004, 08:36 AM  |
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