 Libra Love, A Hallowe'en Tale - *Not Work Safe* |
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 Oct 28 2005, 11:06 PM
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Great Dragon  Group: Members Posts: 6,748 Joined: 5-July 02 Member No.: 2,935  |
Just a bad idea.
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Oct 28 2005, 11:24 PM
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Shadowrun Setting Nerd Group: Banned Posts: 3,632 Joined: 28-June 05 From: Pissing on pedestrians from my electronic ivory tower. Member No.: 7,473 |
Edited for lack of further relevance.
This post has been edited by SL James: Oct 28 2005, 11:48 PM |
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Oct 28 2005, 11:38 PM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 104 Joined: 12-July 05 From: Rio de Janeiro, Brazil Member No.: 7,496 |
Iīm not actually used to porn written in english, (As a matter of fact, iīm not even used to portuguese written porn) so i will refrain from commenting the writing style and keep focused in the character concept. I really like it. Itīs interesting, itīs disturbing, itīs the kind of NPC i would be proud to create myself (if one is to be proud of NPCs). If i ever have the chance to use such an character in the campaign I GM, i would use it. (with some minor tweaking, perhaps) |
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Oct 28 2005, 11:40 PM
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Great Dragon Group: Members Posts: 6,748 Joined: 5-July 02 Member No.: 2,935 |
Nah, SLJames is right, this was a bad idea brought on by a chain of bad ideas.
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Oct 28 2005, 11:41 PM
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Running, running, running Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 2,220 Joined: 18-October 04 From: North Carolina Member No.: 6,769 |
sounds like AH is a bit... frustrated heh...
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Oct 28 2005, 11:42 PM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 104 Joined: 12-July 05 From: Rio de Janeiro, Brazil Member No.: 7,496 |
wow, where is it ?
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Oct 28 2005, 11:44 PM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 177 Joined: 21-October 05 From: In a Starbucks café near you Member No.: 7,870 |
For what it's worth, I thought it was cool. :)
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Oct 28 2005, 11:45 PM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 104 Joined: 12-July 05 From: Rio de Janeiro, Brazil Member No.: 7,496 |
well, iīve saved a copy in notepad, so i can blackmail AH when the opportunity arises :-)
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Oct 28 2005, 11:46 PM
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Great Dragon Group: Members Posts: 6,748 Joined: 5-July 02 Member No.: 2,935 |
AH should know better than to start his Horror Movie Weekend early. I concur with SL James that this was both inappropriate and poorly done...although I appreciate the ego rub, I think I need some sleep.
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Oct 29 2005, 02:48 AM
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Prime Runner Group: Members Posts: 3,577 Joined: 26-February 02 From: Gwynedd Valley PA Member No.: 1,221 |
Ego rub? You tease.
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Oct 29 2005, 02:55 AM
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Man In The Machine Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 2,264 Joined: 26-February 02 From: I-495 S Member No.: 1,105 |
Auh, I missed one of AHs wonderfull stories? Bummer
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Oct 29 2005, 03:50 AM
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Horror Group: Members Posts: 5,322 Joined: 15-June 05 From: BumFuck, New Jersey Member No.: 7,445 |
Please, will ri. You must send the document out to us!
Please, oh please! |
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Oct 29 2005, 04:03 AM
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Canon Companion Group: Members Posts: 8,021 Joined: 2-March 03 From: The Morgue, Singapore LTG Member No.: 4,187 |
First, you got to score 4 or more successes in an Etiquette 8 test. Then if he does attempt to send you the doc, the following will be posted on Dumpshock:
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Oct 29 2005, 05:11 AM
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Midnight Toker Group: Members Posts: 7,686 Joined: 4-July 04 From: Zombie Drop Bear Santa's Workshop Member No.: 6,456 |
It wasn't snuff porn, quite frankly. It was far to tame to be considered such. If it were in a movie it would earn a PG-13 rating, perhaps an R, depending on the rater's prejudices. Perhaps I am a bit jaded, but it lacked the emotional impact of actual snuf porn.
The concept of a surviving conjoined twin acting as the ghost chain for a sibling that died as a result of seperation surgery has quite a bit of promise. I would dare say that it is brilliant in its uniqueness and its plausibility. The sexual degredation is more suited to a Scarlet Woman story. In fact, I first assumed the victim to be a prospective Scarlet Woman when I began reading the story. However, if one assumes that the magician is acting as a proxy for his dead sibling's essence drain power then it isn't at all misplaced. (I'm not sure if the spectre actually has essence drain but it seemed that way from the test. Of course, the pseudo-possession works better for an astral-only apparition.) It also invokes images of homosexual twin ghost incest without actually implying such. That's always good. Likewise, equating astral links with love does make sense for such a warped psyche considering that it was his astral link with his brother that kept the child in this world. Murder as an acct of love isn't out of place for one who is so intimately connected with the dead, either. In fact, when I read the story I got an impression of Libra surrounded by the still loyal ghosts of his brainwashed victims. The symbolic linking is the only thing that I found incongurant to the story. Libra's acts in this story are deeply personal, but long-distance assasination for hire seems deeply impersonal. I usderstand that this is simply a result of my fleshbound percepts and that to Libra it is the astral connection that matters, not the physical proximity. That only leaves the for hire part of the incongruency. While it is rarely a good idea to mix business and personal matters, some people do. I suppose it works for Libra. However, I wouldn't describe such a deeply personal sacrifice as simple blood magic to recduce drain. It would have to be much more powerful than that. Not quite GGD powerful, but certainly major mojo. I'm not ego stroking when I sya that I'll make every attempt to steal this charcter. |
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Oct 29 2005, 05:27 AM
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Uncle Fisty Group: Admin Posts: 13,891 Joined: 3-January 05 From: Next To Her Member No.: 6,928 |
so what are you stroking?
Now I'm bummed that I can't read the story. :S |
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Oct 29 2005, 12:17 PM
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Horror Group: Members Posts: 5,322 Joined: 15-June 05 From: BumFuck, New Jersey Member No.: 7,445 |
#^*@)^*@)!!!!!
ME wants REAAAD! |
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Oct 29 2005, 11:19 PM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 104 Joined: 12-July 05 From: Rio de Janeiro, Brazil Member No.: 7,496 |
Well, iīve been lurking around for time enough to learn that AH happens to be a resourceful being. So, fearing overwhelming retaliation from underground sources, i will refrain from forwarding the message without AH permission. Unless, of course, one offers me 10^6 :nuyen: , a new SIN and some tickets to Hawwaii. 99% in advance, 1% after the file reaches destination :grinbig: (iīve tried my best to write in proper english. I would be glad to be promptly informed in case i havenīt) |
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Oct 29 2005, 11:47 PM
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Awakened Asset Group: Members Posts: 4,464 Joined: 9-April 05 From: AGS, North German League Member No.: 7,309 |
I for one salute your attitude! *bows*
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Oct 30 2005, 12:51 AM
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Running, running, running Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 2,220 Joined: 18-October 04 From: North Carolina Member No.: 6,769 |
I think you did too... but for added dramatic effect, skip the mathetmatical short hand... and just say it unless he offers you six...MILLLLLLIIIIOOON nuyen... ahhh, that felt good... |
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Oct 30 2005, 01:07 AM
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Horror Group: Members Posts: 5,322 Joined: 15-June 05 From: BumFuck, New Jersey Member No.: 7,445 |
How about I offer not to send ten large guys 'round to find the file and extract it along with the rest of your headware memory? :)
C'mon, AH. Post it again! |
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Oct 30 2005, 01:09 AM
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Resident Legionnaire Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 2,136 Joined: 8-August 04 From: Usually Work Member No.: 6,550 |
Dude, you could build a sammie with that. |
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Oct 30 2005, 01:12 AM
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Running, running, running Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 2,220 Joined: 18-October 04 From: North Carolina Member No.: 6,769 |
err ya, for some reason i thought he had typed 6^10 million, which woulda been 60,000,000,000, which woulda been 60...BILLLIIIIOOOON... as appose to 10^6 which is 10,000,000, which is 10 MILLLLION....
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Oct 30 2005, 01:58 AM
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Target Group: Members Posts: 68 Joined: 9-October 04 Member No.: 6,738 |
I am dissapointed to have missed it, but I understand hating something you've posted...you know it just isn't what you wanted. But don't give up on it. Put it aside, tweek it, and have another go. It sounds (from comments I've read) that it is a good concept, just one in need of a little work.
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Oct 30 2005, 04:09 AM
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Running Target Group: Members Posts: 1,283 Joined: 17-May 05 Member No.: 7,398 |
Actually, 6^10 is 60,466,176. You're thinking of 6x10^10. And 10^6 is one million. 10^7 is ten million. |
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Oct 30 2005, 01:05 PM
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Running, running, running Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 2,220 Joined: 18-October 04 From: North Carolina Member No.: 6,769 |
saee, and this why i said just spell it out :D.. but are you sure on that second one? i counted the 0's out on that one.... |
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