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 Aug 7 2010, 05:20 AM
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Immortal Elf  Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 14,358 Joined: 2-December 07 From: Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada Member No.: 14,465  |
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Aug 7 2010, 05:35 AM
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Target Group: Members Posts: 30 Joined: 16-June 10 Member No.: 18,712 |
I found it an interesting read.
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Aug 7 2010, 05:55 AM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 254 Joined: 9-July 10 From: Zeist, NL Member No.: 18,807 |
Yes, you should. Setting documents like that can be very nice, and the writing was pretty good. It had one or two small hitches here and there (mostly in flow) but it otherwise read nice enough that that was forgiven quickly.
It's especially nice for GMs who want to have something on hand that injects character into the world from a different perspective. |
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Aug 7 2010, 11:04 AM
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Target Group: Members Posts: 12 Joined: 10-April 10 Member No.: 18,435 |
I so like sitting text like this one. Probably going to use it next session. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif) If I may?
Your a good writer in my book at least. |
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Aug 7 2010, 12:04 PM
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Running Target Group: Members Posts: 1,190 Joined: 31-May 09 From: London, UK Member No.: 17,229 |
Yes, it was good. Just one word about typesetting: maybe you should differentiate the main text from the comments more. In the books, they use a different font for that, but Italic should be enough. It would make things easier for readers who don't want to read linearly.
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Aug 7 2010, 01:13 PM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 199 Joined: 16-September 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 5,625 |
Depends - are you going to also keep writing fiction vignettes? (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)
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Aug 7 2010, 01:54 PM
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Immortal Elf Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 14,358 Joined: 2-December 07 From: Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada Member No.: 14,465 |
QUOTE (Eugene @ Aug 7 2010, 08:13 AM)  Depends - are you going to also keep writing fiction vignettes? (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif) Yes, but I have to finish the Fallout 3 one that I'm currently working on. Already starting on ideas for the next Shadowrun one. |
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Aug 7 2010, 01:55 PM
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Immortal Elf Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 14,358 Joined: 2-December 07 From: Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada Member No.: 14,465 |
QUOTE (Traul @ Aug 7 2010, 07:04 AM) Yes, it was good. Just one word about typesetting: maybe you should differentiate the main text from the comments more. In the books, they use a different font for that, but Italic should be enough. It would make things easier for readers who don't want to read linearly. Good suggestion, but it's hard to copy/paste that from OpenOffice.Org to the Forums. I'll probably take the time to change the size of the headers, and make other parts Bold to make looking at it easier. |
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Aug 7 2010, 02:03 PM
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Runner Group: Members Posts: 2,899 Joined: 29-October 09 From: Leiden, the Netherlands Member No.: 17,814 |
It's a nice read, it could actually be a part of a new player's primer on equipment selection.
I do agree that the comments should be more visually distinguishable. Italics would work fine, or somehow altering their position with respect to the left margin. Maybe it'd be easier to put them up as PDF files? That would aid in printing them.. |
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Aug 7 2010, 02:03 PM
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Immortal Elf Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 14,358 Joined: 2-December 07 From: Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada Member No.: 14,465 |
QUOTE (Ascalaphus @ Aug 7 2010, 09:03 AM) I do agree that the comments should be more visually distinguishable. Italics would work fine, or somehow altering their position with respect to the left margin. Maybe it'd be easier to put them up as PDF files? That would aid in printing them.. Can be easily enough done, but how'd I get them on the Forums? |
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Aug 7 2010, 03:19 PM
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Runner Group: Members Posts: 2,899 Joined: 29-October 09 From: Leiden, the Netherlands Member No.: 17,814 |
QUOTE (CanRay @ Aug 7 2010, 04:03 PM) Can be easily enough done, but how'd I get them on the Forums? Host it on a website of your own or use a third-party downloadable file hosting service? That's what people mostly seem to do here, though I don't really know which ones are good.. |
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Aug 7 2010, 03:39 PM
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Advocatus Diaboli Group: Members Posts: 13,994 Joined: 20-November 07 From: USA Member No.: 14,282 |
Google Docs or Sites are easy ways. Dropbox is a good syncing service with Public/Shared folders. DivShare is another free file hosting option, again with Public/Shared options.
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Aug 7 2010, 04:30 PM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 298 Joined: 15-March 09 Member No.: 16,974 |
QUOTE (CanRay @ Aug 7 2010, 06:55 AM) Good suggestion, but it's hard to copy/paste that from OpenOffice.Org to the Forums. I'll probably take the time to change the size of the headers, and make other parts Bold to make looking at it easier. Edited: Scratch that. The Quote tag only allows a limited number of uses in one post. |
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Aug 7 2010, 07:23 PM
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Running Target Group: Members Posts: 1,424 Joined: 7-December 09 From: Freedonia Member No.: 17,952 |
for such verbosity better flow would be nice. reading that much in a forum post is like trying to eat a 6' roast beef poboy in one sitting without putting it down. Its ok for a bit, but after a while it gets painful and messy. Breaking it up into easily discernible courses and a menu for where the parts are makes the whole thing much more stomachable.
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Aug 7 2010, 08:45 PM
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Target Group: Members Posts: 38 Joined: 13-July 10 Member No.: 18,820 |
physical fluff is great and adds so much more to a players experience than you can see from the GM chair. So yes yes keep it up
I agree with Daylen though, a quick read sinks in better. |
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Aug 8 2010, 03:57 AM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 419 Joined: 22-May 10 From: Germany Member No.: 18,604 |
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Aug 8 2010, 07:36 PM
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Moving Target Group: Members Posts: 492 Joined: 28-July 09 Member No.: 17,440 |
I like it a lot. Would be helpful to newer players to help let them know what to use for what situation, but also helpful to new GMs to give them a good idea what opposition might have and why.
It also made me start thinking a lot more about cased and caseless ammo, something I have been ignoring in my game as I just don't know much about it and my group seems to be happy without having to pick up shell cases. I don't know anything about openoffice so the tags may confuse it, but I think you should be able to just put [*i] (minus *) at the start of a comment and put [*/i] (minus *) at the end of one. This will allow you to copy and paste into a forum post and the tags will make it italic. |
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Aug 9 2010, 06:55 AM
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Immortal Elf Group: Dumpshocked Posts: 14,358 Joined: 2-December 07 From: Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada Member No.: 14,465 |
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Aug 9 2010, 09:11 AM
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Target Group: Members Posts: 51 Joined: 9-December 09 From: Europe Member No.: 17,956 |
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Aug 9 2010, 09:35 AM
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jacked in Group: Admin Posts: 9,040 Joined: 26-February 02 Member No.: 463 |
Yep, very nice writeups! (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)
One thing, though... I would color the ^^-comments to better distinguish them from the rest of the text. It simply makes reading everything so much easier. Bye Thanee |
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Aug 9 2010, 11:03 AM
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Running Target Group: Members Posts: 1,251 Joined: 11-September 04 From: GA Member No.: 6,651 |
<-- Enjoys your write-ups
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