Athletics is a crappy skill group. Break it up into what you actually need.
Your stats are screwed up all weird, I can't even figure out what race he is. First off, Ork is the most point efficient for what you are trying to do, Dwarf second, troll third, human forth elf fifth. Second, you can't have two sixes in stats, and you also shouldn't want to. You can build a solid stat block for what you want to do, including race for around 160 points, but considering the spread, you could stretch it to 200.
Qualities: Born rich is a terrible quality unless you are going for an epic gimmick. You are better off just making better spending choices.
Warez: Drop the cerebral boosters, they are expensive and bad. Take skill group support bioware and such.
Lemme give you a few semi-similar builds I have lying around for some inspiration.
Pistols/Face
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Face, 400BP (Luigi)
A Made Man, all chromed out, expanding his criminal repertoire to make some extra Nuyen in the Shadows.
Race: Human (0 BP)
Mundane (0BP)
Attributes (210 BP):
B: 3
A: 3 (9*)
R: 5 (6)
S: 2 (3*)
C: 5 (8*)
I: 3
L: 3
W: 3
Edge: 4
Essence: 0.9
Initiative: 8(9)
IP: 2
CM: 10 (12)/ 10
Qualities (-5 BP):
Ambidextrous (5 BP)
Privileged Family Name (5 BP)
Made Man (10 BP)
Trust Fund, Medium (10 BP)
Wanted (-10 BP)
SINner, Criminal (-10 BP)
Moderate Allergy, Soycaf (-10 BP)
Moderate Addiction, Alcohol (-5 BP)
Mad Skills (128 BP):
Influence (Group): 4
Stealth (Group): 2
Pistols: 6
Dodge: 4
Perception: 4
Pilot (Ground Craft): 2
Unarmed Combat: 1
Knowledge Skills (18 free):
Languages
Italian: N
English: 4
Japanese: 3
Mandarin: 2
Cantonese: 2
Knowledge
Crime Syndicates: 3
Evaluate Goods: 2
Lone Star Patrols: 2
Contacts (24 BP):
Gordon, Fixer 4/5
Fredo, Mafia Consigliore 4/4
Vincent, Street Doc 1/2
Vinnie, Armorer 1/3
With Cha*2 House Rule
Frank, Police Chief 3/4
Mikey, ID Manufacturer 2/1
Resources (43 BP), 215,000 Nuyen:
Cyberware
Wired Reflexes 1; 11,000; 2E
Cybereyes, Rating 3; 9,250 0.4E
Smartlink
Vision Enhancement 3
Thermographic Vision
Low Light Vision
Flare Compensation
Left Cyberarm, Obvious Full Arm; 29,250; 1E
Customized Agility, +3
Enhanced Agility 3
Cyberarm Gyromount
Cyberarm Slide
Right Cyberarm, Obvious Full Arm; 29,250; 1E
Customized Agility, +3
Enhanced Agility 3
Cyberarm Gyromount
Cyberarm Slide
Bioware
Tailored Pheromones 3; 45,000, 0.6E
Bone Density Augmentation 1; 20,000, 0.2E
Platelet Factory; 25,000, 0.6E
Vehicle
Mercury Comet; 14,000
Armor
Mortimer Greatcoat, 6/5, 3,000
Lined Coat, 6/4, 700
Actioneer Business Clothes 5/3, 1,500
Weapons
2x Ares Viper Sliverguns, Internal Smartgun System; 2,000
2x Ruger Super Warhawks, Internal Smartgun System; 1,000
2x Ares Predator IV; 700
2x Yamaha Sakura Fubuki, Top Mounted Smartgun System; 4,800
2x Morrissey Ιlan, Internal Smartgun System; 1,800
Weapon Accessories
4x Concealable Holster; 300
4x Quick Draw Holster; 400
4x Spare Clips (Ares Predator IV), 20
4x Spare Clips (Ares Viper Slivergun), 20
2x Spare Clips (Morrissey Elan), 10
Ammunition
60x Rounds of Ex-Explosive Ammo (Ruger Super Warhawk); 600
120x Rounds of Flechette Ammo (Ares Viper Sliverguns); 1,200
20x Rounds of Ex-Explosive Ammo (Morrissey Ιlan); 200
300x Rounds of Normal Ammo (Ares Predator IV); 600
80x Rounds of Explosive Ammo (Yamaha Sakura Fubuki); 400
ID
2x Fake SIN, Rating 3; 6,000
Fake SIN, Rating 4; 4,000
Fake License 4 (Cyberware, tied to rating 4); 400
Fake License 3 (Firearms, tied to rating 3); 300
Fake License 3 (Cyberware, tied to rating 3); 300
Commlink
2x Sony Emperor; 1,400
Renraku Ichi; 600
Fist Based Assasin
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Burnout Assassin 300BP
Race: Ork (20 BP)
Qualities (-15 BP):
Adept (5 BP)
Martial Arts 3 (15 BP)
Sensitive System (-15 BP)
Moderate Addiction, Kamikaze (-10 BP)
Wanted (-10 BP)
Attributes (265 BP):
B: 7(11*+1**)
A: 4(6+1**)
R: 4(6)
S: 7(9+2**)
C: 3
I: 3
L: 2
W: 3(4**)
Edge: 1
Magic: 4 (6)
Essence: 4
Initiative: 7(9)
IP: 3(4**)
Physical CM: 12
Stun CM: 10
Note: *=Bone Density; **=Kamikaze
Mad Skills (90 BP):
Stealth (Group): 3
Unarmed Combat: 6
Gymnastics: 3
Longrarms: 3
Con: 2
Etiquette: 1
Knowledge Skills (15 Free):
Languages
Mandarin: N
English 3
Japanese: 3
Thai: 3
Knowledge
Black Markets (Street): 4
Trids (Interest): 1
Sports (Interest): 1
Martial Arts Manuvers and Styles (4 BP)
Muay Thai (+1 DV)
Nanquan Kung Fu (+1 DV)
Shotokan Karate (+1 DV)
Finishing Move (2 BP)
Set-Up (2 BP)
Powers (4 PP)
Critical Strike 4 (1 PP)
Improved Reflexes 2 (2.5 PP)
Killing Hands (0.5 PP)
Contacts (4 BP)
Fixer
Loyalty: 2, Connection: 2
Resources (32 BP), 160,000 Nuyen:
Bioware; 110,000₯, 2E
Bioware, [Grade], [Rating]; X₯, YE
Bone Density Augmentation 4, S; 80,000₯, 1.2E
Muscle Augmentation 2, S; 14,000₯, 0.4E
Muscle Toner 2, S; 16,000₯, 0.4E
Vehicles, 17,000₯
Hyundai Shin-Hyung (Arsenal, pg 109); 17,000₯
Armor, 9,600₯
Actioneer Business Clothes (5/3); 1,500₯
Armor Jacket (8/6); 900₯
Form Fitting Body Armor, Full Body Suit (+6/+2*); 1,600₯
Mortimer Greatcoat (6/5); 3,000₯
PPP System, Concealable, Full (Less Helmet) (+2/+4); 900₯
Urban Explorer Jumpsuit w/ Helmet; 550₯
Victory Industrious Coverall w/ Hard Hat (5/6); 950₯
Weapons; 7,875₯
Ranger Arms SM-4; 6,200₯
Enfield AS-7; 1,100₯
Defiance T-250 Short Barreled; 575₯
Laser Sight, Barrel
Ammunition; 3,000₯
30x Flechette Rounds, Shotgun; 300₯
50x Ex-Explosive Slug Rounds, Shotgun; 500₯
20x Shock Lock Rounds, Shotgun; 140₯
50x Ex-Explosive Rounds, Sniper; 500₯
50x Subsonic Rounds, Sniper; 200₯
20x Neuro Stun Capsule Rounds, Sniper; 1,260₯
4x Magazines, SM-4; 20₯
2x Magazines, AS-7; 10₯
4x Magazines, T-250; 20₯
2x Drum Clips, AS-7; 50₯
Matrix Gear; 2,500₯
Renraku Sensei, Response 2, Signal 4; 1,000₯
Iris Orb, 3, 3; 1,000₯
AR Gloves, 250₯
Biometric Reader; 200₯
Subvocal Microphone; 50₯
Identification and Licenses; 4,800₯
Fake Sin 4; 4,000₯
Fake License 4, Armor, 400₯
Fake License 4, Firearms; 400₯
Drugs, 200₯
2x Doses of Kamikaze, 200₯
Misc Gear; 25₯
Certified Credstick; 25₯
Lifestyle; 5,000₯
Middle, 1 Month
All Purpose Gunner
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Weapons Expert, 400BP (Ace Foxstrike)
Race: Ork (20 BP)
Mundane (0 BP)
Attributes (170 BP):
B: 6 (8*)
A: 5 (7)
R: 4 (6)
S: 3 (5)
C: 2
I: 4
L: 3
W: 3
Edge: 1
Essence: 1.60
Initiative: 10
CM: 11/10
Qualities (-15):
Black Market Pipeline, Weapon (10 BP)
Martial Arts, Krav Maga (10 BP)
Prejudice, actively prejudiced against Elves (-15 BP)
Combat Monster (-10 BP)
SINner, Criminal (-10 BP)
Mad Skills (156):
Firearms (Group): 4(5)
Heavy Weapons: 6(7)
Dodge: 4
Perception: 4
Gunnery: 3
Unarmed Combat: 3
Armorer: 3
Etiquette: 3
Hardware: 1
Pilot (Ground Craft): 1
Parachuting: 1
Knowledge Skills (24 Free):
Languages
English: N
Japanese: 4
Mandarin: 3
German: 2
Russian: 2
Knowledge
Mercenary Hangouts: 4
Firearms Design: 4
Military: 3
Combat Drugs: 1
Martial Arts
Krav Maga: Take Aim as a Free Action
Krav Maga: Ready Weapon as a Free Action
Contacts (22 BP)
Armorer (Black Market Pipeline) 4/4
Fixer 3/4
Supply Sergeant 4/3
With Cha*2 House Rule
Pirate 2/2
Resources (47 BP), 235,000 Nuyen:
Cyberware; 41,250
Wired Reflexes, rating 2; 32,000, 3E
Cybereyes, Rating 3; 9,250 0.4E
Smartlink
Vision Enhancement 3
Thermographic Vision
Low Light Vision
Flare Compensation
Bioware; 70,000
Bone Density Augmentation, rating 2; 40,000, 0.6E
Muscle Augmentation, rating 2; 14,000, 0.4E
Muscle Toner, rating 2; 16,000, 0.4E
Reflex Recorder, Firearms Skill Group; 25,000, 0.2E
Reflex Recorder, Heavy Weapons; 10,000, 0.1E
Vehicle; 28,000
Rover Model 2068, 2x Smuggling Compartments; 28,000
Armor; 16,200
Armored Jacket, 900
Camouflage Suit, 1,200
Chameleon Suit, Thermal Dampening 6; 11,000
Actioneer Business Suit, 1,500
Lined Coat, 700
Mortimer Greatcoat, 3,000
Form Fitting Body Armor, Half Suit, 900
Weapons; 25,050
Morrissey Ιlan, A20; 450
Yamaha Sakura Fubuki, Top Mounted Smartgun System; 2,400
Ares Viper Slivergun, Internal Smartgun, SR307; 1,000
Savalette Guardian, A24; 800
Ares Alpha, Gas Vent 3, Airburst Link, Shock Pad, SR308; 2,650
Ares Desert Strike, Internal Smartgun, Silencer, A28; 6,900
Enfield AS-7, Internal Smartgun, Gas Vent 3, A29; 2,600
Stoner-Ares M202, External Smartgun, Gas Vent 3, Shock Pad, SR310; 5,350
Ares MGL-12, External Smartgun, Airburst Link, SR 310; 2,900
Ammunition; 6,230
10x EX-Explosive Rounds, Holdout; 100
200x Normal Rounds, Light Pistol; 400
100x Flechette Rounds, Heavy Pistol; 1,000
100x Normal Rounds, Heavy Pistol; 200
200x Normal Rounds, Assault Rifle; 400
30x EX-Explosive Rounds, Sniper Rifle; 300
50x Flechette Rounds, Shotgun; 500
50x Normal Rounds, Shotgun; 100
50x Shock Lock Rounds, Shotgun; 350
40x HE Grenades; 1,800
9x White Phosphorus Grenades; 1,080
Weapon Accessories; 4,500
2x Concealable Holster, 150
2x Smart Firing Platform; 4,000
2x Quick Draw Holsters, 200
7x Heavy Pistol Clips, 35
2x Shotgun Clips, 10
2x Shotgun Drums, 50
6x Assault Rifle Clips, 30
4x Grenade Launcher Clips, 20
Commlink; 4,850
Renraku Sensei, 1,000
Mangadyne Deva Operating System (System 3), 800
Firewall 6, 3,000
Subvocal Microphone, 50
ID; 12,800
3x Fake SIN, rating 4; 12,000
2x Fake License (Firearms), rating 4; 800
Misc Gear; 700
Respirator 6; 600₯
4x Certified Credsticks; 100₯
Lifestyle; 5,000
Middle, 1 Month
Chrome Ninja
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Chuugo Ironsoul Okamoto, (Cyber Ninja, 400BP)
Race: Ork (20 BP)
Qualities (0 BP):
Ambidextrous; (5 BP)
Biocompatibility, Cyberware; (10 BP)
Born Rich; (10 BP)
Martial Arts 2; (10 BP)
In Debt, 30,000₯; (-30 BP)
SINner (-5 BP)
Attributes (200 BP):
B: 7
A: 3 (9*)
R: 5 (7)
S: 3 (11*)
C: 2
I: 5
L: 2
W: 3
Edge: 4
Essence: 0.015
Initiative: 10 (12)
IP: 3
CM: 16/15
Mad Skills (110 BP)
Stealth (Group): 3
Blades: 6
Perception: 4
Gymnastics: 3
Pistols: 3
Longarms: 2
Con: 1
Locksmithing: 1
Knowledge Skills (21 Free)
Languages
Japanese: N
English: 4
Spanish: 4
Mandarin: 4
Knowledge
Security Procedures: 3
Martial Arts: 3
Zen Buddhism: 3
Martial Arts (4 BP)
Sangre y Acero, +1DV to Blades
Ninjutsu, +1 die on Infiltration Tests
Maneuvers
Finishing Move; (2 BP)
Set Up; (2 BP)
Contacts (6 BP)
Fixer 3/3
Resources (60 BP): 330,000₯
Warez; 271,250₯, 5.985E
Cyberlimbs
Torso, Alphaware (22,900₯ base x2) 45,800₯, 1.2E:
Obvious Torso; 1.5 E, 10C, 20,000₯
Body 4; [4]C, 800₯
Armor 2; [4]C, 600₯
Smuggling Compartment; [2]C, 1,500₯
Left Arm; 26,300₯, 0.45E
Lower Arm; 0.45E, 10C, 10,000₯
Customized Cyberlimb (Agility) 2; 3,000₯
Customized Cyberlimb (Body) 4; 6,000₯
Agility 4; [4]C, 1,000₯
Armor 1; [2]C, 300₯
Cyberarm Gyromount; [4]C, 6,000₯
Right Arm, Alphaware, (31,400₯ base x2); 62,800₯, 0.8E
Full Arm; 1E, 15C, 15,000₯
Customized Cyberlimb (Agility) 3; 4,500₯
Customized Cyberlimb (Strength) 5; 7,500₯
Agility 3; [3]C, 750₯
Body 4; [4]C, 800₯
Strength 3; [3]C, 750₯
Armor 1; [2]C, 300₯
Spur; [3]C, 1,800₯
Left Leg; 26,300₯, 0.45E
Lower Leg; 0.45E, 12C, 10,000₯
Customized Cyberlimb (Agility) 2; 3,000₯
Customized Cyberlimb (Body) 4; 6,000₯
Agility 4; [4]C, 1,000₯
Hydraulics 6; [6]C, 6,000₯
Armor 1; [2]C, 300₯
Right Leg; 26,300₯, 0.45E
Lower Leg; 0.45E, 12C, 10,000₯
Customized Cyberlimb (Agility) 2; 3,000₯
Customized Cyberlimb (Body) 4; 6,000₯
Agility 4; [4]C, 1,000₯
Hydraulics 6; [6]C, 6,000₯
Armor 1; [2]C, 300₯
Eyes; 5,750₯, 0.4E
Cybereyes Rating 3; 0.4E, 12C, 1,000₯
Flare Compensation; [1]C, 750₯
Low-Light Vision; [2]C, 1,000₯
Smartlink; [3]C, 1,000₯
Thermograpic Vision; [2]C, 1,000₯
Vision Magnification; [2]C, 1,000₯
Cyberware
Wired Reflexes 2, Alphaware; 64,000₯, 2.4E
Commlink; 2,000₯, 0.2E
Radar Sensor 4; 12,000₯, 0.3E
Essence Costs
Cyberlimbs: 3.75
Cyberware: 2.9
Biocompatibility: -0.665
Total Essence Cost: 5.985E
Gear; 58,750₯
Armor; 23,850₯
Chameleon Suit (6/4), Thermal Damepning 6; 11,000₯
Mortimer Greatcoat (6/5); 3,000₯
Form Fitting Body Armor (+6/+2), Full Body Suit; 1,600₯
SecureTech PPP system, vitals protector and leg and arm casings (+2/+2); 550₯
Riot Shield, Ruthenium Coating (+2/+6); 7,700₯
Weapons; 12,500₯
Morrissey Ιlan, A20; 450₯
Ares Desert Strike, Internal Smartgun, Internal Silencer, Chameleon Coating, Easy Breakdown (Manual), A28; 12,050₯
Custom Weapons: 4,850₯
Bloodhawk
Modified Ruger Super Warhawk
Base: 250₯
Modifications:
Internal Smartgun System; 1C, 250₯
Improved Range Finder, 1C, 1,000₯
Ammo Skip System; 1C, 250₯
Firing Selection Change, Small, SS to SA; 1C, 300₯
Increased Cylinder; 2C, 500₯
Statline
Weapon Damage AP Mode RC Ammo Max Avail Cost
Bloodhawk 6P -2 SA - 8(cy) 8R 2,550₯
Raptor
Modifed Ares Predator IV
Base: 350₯
Modifications:
Silencer; 2C, 400₯
Electronic Firing; 2C, 1,000₯
Easy Breakdown, Powered; 2C, 550₯
Statline
Weapon Damage AP Mode RC Ammo Max Avail Cost
Raptor 5P -1 SA - 15© 10R 2,300₯
Ammunition and Accessories; 3,000₯
10x Capsule Rounds w/Neurostun, Holdout; 630₯
20x Hi-C Rounds, Holdout; 300₯
100x Normal Rounds, Heavy Pistol; 200₯
60x Ex-Explosive Rounds, Heavy Pistol; 600₯
50x Subsonic Rounds, Heavy Pistol; 200₯
30x Ex-Explosive Rounds, Sniper; 300₯
20x Subsonic Rounds, Sniper; 80₯
20x Capsule Rounds w/Neurostun, Sniper; 630₯
4x, Spare Magazine, Heavy Pistol; 20₯
2x Spare Magazine, Holdout; 10₯
Spare Magazine, Sniper Rifle; 5₯
3x Concealed Holsters; 275₯
Commlink; 2,250₯
Novatech Airwave; 1,250₯
Metalink; 100₯
Iris Orb; 1,000₯
B&E Gear; 9,300₯
Maglock Passkey 2; 4,000₯
Autopicker 6; 1,200₯
Keycard Copier 6; 1,800₯
Sequencer 4; 800₯
3x Nanopaste Disguises (Small); 1,500₯
Misc Gear; 650₯
Respirator 6; 600₯
2x Certified Credsticks; 50₯
Lifestyle; 2,000₯
Low, 1 month; 2,000₯
Dice Pools
Jump: 18 dice (Max Vert 6.6m, Max Horizontal 29.7m)
Blades: 15 dice, 10P
Pistols: 14 dice
Longarms: 13 dice
Dodge: 10 dice
Infiltration: 13 dice
Palming: 12 dice
Shadowing: 8 dice
Disguise: 8 dice
Armor 22/19
Soak: 29/26
Perfect Gunslinger
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Gunslinger Adept, 400BP (Dread Cthulhu)
Race: Elf (30 BP)
Qualities (0 BP)
Adept; 5 BP
Ambidextrous; 5 BP
Aptitude (Pistols); 10 BP
Changeling, Surge II; 10 BP
Restricted Gear, Muscle Toner; 5 BP
Astral Beacon; -5 BP
Low Pain Tolerance; -10 BP
Sensitive System; -15 BP
Mild Alcohol Addiction; -5 BP
Attributes (245 BP):
B: 3
A: 8(12)
R: 4(6)
S: 2
C: 4
I: 4
L: 2
W: 3
Edge: 2
Magic: 4(from 5)
Essence: 5
Initiative: 8(10)
CM: 10/10
Metagenic Qualities
Metagenic Improvement (Agility); 20 BP
Cephalopodan Skull; -10 BP
Mad Skills (96 BP)
Pistols: 7(10)
Dodge: 4(5)
Perception: 4
Intimidation: 3
Infiltration: 2
Shadowing: 2
Knowledge Skills (18 free)
Languages
Sperethiel: N
Japanese: 3
English: 3
Knowledge
Firearm Design: 4
Lone Star Patrols: 3
Corporate Politics: 3
Fine Whiskey: 2
Adept Powers (4 PP)
Improved Reflexes 2; 2.5 PP
Improved Ability, Pistols 2; 1 PP
Combat Sense 1; 0.5 PP
Contacts (6 BP)
Fixer 3/3
Gear (23 BP): 85,000₯
Bioware; 52,000₯, 1.0E
Muscle Toner, rating 4; 32,000₯, 0.8E
Reflex Recorder, Pistols; 10,000₯, 0.1E
Reflex Recorder, Dodge; 10,000₯, 0.1E
Weapons, 10,350₯
2x Bloodhawks; 5,300₯
2x Raptors; 4,600₯
2x Morrissey Ιlan; 450₯
Ammunition and Accessories; 3,550₯
10x Capsule Rounds w/Neurostun, Holdout; 630₯
20x Hi-C Rounds, Holdout; 300₯
120x Normal Rounds, Heavy Pistol; 240₯
60x Ex-Explosive Rounds, Heavy Pistol; 600₯
50x Subsonic Rounds, Heavy Pistol; 200₯
20x Capsule Rounds w/Neurostun, Heavy Pistol; 630₯
4x, Spare Magazine, Heavy Pistol; 20₯
2x Spare Magazine, Holdout; 10₯
6x Concealed Holsters; 550₯
22x HE Grenades; 990₯
Armor; 14,000₯
Chameleon Suit (6/4), Thermal Damepning 6; 11,000₯
Mortimer Greatcoat (6/5); 3,000₯
Commlink; 3,790₯
Novatech Airwave; 1,250₯
3x Metalinks; 300₯
Iris Orb; 1,000₯
FTL Matrixware Power Suite; 1,240₯
Misc Gear; 4,310₯
Respirator 6; 600₯
4x Certified Credsticks; 100₯
Autopicker 6; 1,200₯
Goggles, Ultrasound, Vision Enhancement 3, Smartlink; 2,000₯
Earbuds, Audio Enhancement 3, Spatial Recognizer; 410₯
ID; 11,000₯
2x Fake SIN, Rating 4; 8,000₯
2x Fake License 4 (Pistols); 800₯
2x Fake License 4 (Concealed Carry) 800₯
Fake License 4, Chameleon Suit; 800₯
Fake License 3, Chameleon Suit; 600₯
Vehicle; 14,000₯
Mercury Comet; 14,000₯
Lifestyle; 2,000₯
Low, 1 month; 2,000₯
Custom Weapons:
Bloodhawk
Modified Ruger Super Warhawk
Base: 250₯
Modifications:
Internal Smartgun System; 1C, 250₯
Improved Range Finder, 1C, 1,000₯
Ammo Skip System; 1C, 250₯
Firing Selection Change, Small, SS to SA; 1C, 300₯
Increased Cylinder; 1C, 500₯
Personalized Grip; 1C, 100₯
Statline
Weapon Damage AP Mode RC Ammo Max Avail Cost
Bloodhawk 6P -2 SA 1 8(cy) 8R 2,650₯
Raptor
Modifed Ares Predator IV
Base: 350₯
Modifications:
Silencer; 2C, 400₯
Electronic Firing; 2C, 1,000₯
Easy Breakdown, Powered; 2C, 550₯
Statline
Weapon Damage AP Mode RC Ammo Max Avail Cost
Raptor 5P -1 SA - 15© 10R 2,300₯
Hope that helps.