The game I play in is slightly higher level then a normal game and has the following differences

500BP build
No restriction on money spent if it’s within your build points
Perception is a free skill equal to your intuition


Concept – A Yak boss in Seattle decided to elevate himself further by creating his own Oni honour guard to use in negotiation with rivals and give him some more face amongst the other bosses. As this boss was heavily invested in bio tech firms the young Oni were all implanted and enhanced to speed up their training and ability in combat.

A chance building fire caused by a hacker disrupting the power supplies during a data steal allows a few of the candidates to escape including one exceedingly reckless Oni going by the name of Speed Demon (due to his unfortunate colouring and general demeanour). Two years later word has started spreading back to the Yaks that there is new talent coming up in the runner community including a very strong and fast Oni just coming into maturity.

BP Cost 500

Attributes = 230
Qualities = 10
Skills = 148
Contacts = 16
Gear and Wear = 96

Attributes

Body = 5 (8 )
Agility = 5 (8 )
Reaction = 5 (8 )
Strength 5 (8 )
Charisma = 3
Intuition = 4
Logic = 2
Willpower = 3
Edge = 3

Essence 3.138

Initiative = 12
IP’s = 3
Physical Track = 12
Stun Track = 10

Qualities

Bilingual
Biocompatibility (bio)
Ambidextrous
Hawkeye
Restricted Gear (superthyroid gland)
Trill Seeker
Media Junkie (mild)
Wanted (Yaks)

Skills (Active)

Blades 4 Swords specialised
Longarms 4 Shotguns specialised
Unarmed 2
Infiltration 4 Urban specialised
Survival 1
Etiquette 2
Negotiation 3
Computers 1
Data Search 1
Perception 4 (free as per house rule)
Running 1
Dodge 4
Pilot Ground Craft 4
Thrown Weapons 1
Navigation 2
Intimidation 1 Interrogation specialised

Skills (knowledge)

18 free points
English N
Japanese N
Cantonese 3
Security Systems 3
Corporate Security Response 3
Martial Arts movies 2
Underworld Politics 2
Local Area (Seattle) 5


Contacts
Jimmy the Nose (fixer) C3 L3
Steve the Finger (Fence) C2 L2
Clive (Bartender) C1 L1
Steve the Scalpel (Street Doc) C2 L2

Bioware
Bone Density R2 Ess 0.54 Cost 40000
Enhanced Articulation Alpha Ess 0.216 Cost 80000
Muscle Augmentation R2 Alpha Ess 0.288 Cost 28000
Muscle Toner R2 Alpha Ess 0.288 Cost 32000
Superthyroid Gland Ess 0.63 Cost 45000
Synaptic Booster R2 Ess 0.9 Cost 160000

Gear

Forearm snap blades x 2
Straight Swords with personalised grips x 2
Ceramic knives x 2
Bayonet (for shotgun)
Concealable holsters for all of the above

Ruger 100 sports rifle with smartlink, sound suppressor modification and personalised grip

Franchi Spas – 22 Shotgun with smartlink (comes as part of basic model) with personalised grip, melee hardening bayonet mount and top mounted flashlight (low light)

10 spare clips for the shotgun with 40 rounds of stick and shock 40 rounds of EX EX and 90 rounds of regular
10 spare clips for the Rifle with 20 rounds APDS 40 rounds EX EX and 80 rounds of regular

Armour and such

Full body FFBA
Urban Explorer jumpsuit with helmet
R3 Thermal Dampening for the jumpsuit
Ruthenium coating for the jumpsuit
Skinlink to connect suit to pan for active control
Backpack with Ruthenium (house rule with cost at 1250 for a small backpack)

Full suit of Steampunk clothing
Odds and sods including Camouflage netting for sniper work, Voice mask for flavour and the normal add on’s Med kit, tag eraser, back up gps unit some stimulant patches and a trauma patch.

Electronics

R4 Glasses with Smartlink, image link, vision magnification
R3 Earbuds with Audio enhancement R3 and spatial recogniser
Trodes
Subvocal mic
All with skin link

Commlink
Hermes Icon with Novatech navi OS with upgraded firewall and cold sim module and some software
Re = 4 Si = 3 Fi = 6 Sy = 4
Plus low end back up commlink

Vehicle

Rover 2068 with Morphing plates spoof chip and Gridlink with override function

Plus Ids and a back up identity in a bug out kit for when you just need to get out of dodge



Any thoughts? I've tried to keep him not just a one trick pony and flexible in a few areas but still with some chance of growth

get a datajack, at the very least. the number of options you open up with one are well worth the low cost. and it would make a lot of sense for the yaks to install a datajack, because it would make the application of a personafix that much easier (obviously he got out before they gave him his).

weapon wise, he should probably pick up a shock glove. those things are very useful to have.

doublepost

Alright, so, various suggestions:
First off, either raise or lower your strength by 1 point. Even numbers give no advantages for damage, so you're better off dropping a point to pull up more BP, or raising it a point to get the extra damage.
Second, small error, but your P track is 11, not 12, because the bone density only adds body for the sake of soak tests, not for any other function of body.
Third, I'd suggest dropping negotiation by 1 to two, and using the BP you save to turn it into the influence group. It costs you one point of negotiation to pick up con and leadership at 2. Similarly you might want to try and rustle up 2 more BP to turn computers 1 and Data search 1 into the electronics group. Having hardware is nice because it'll let you bypass low grade maglocks, though you're unlikely to do much with software. Still, just something to consider.
Fourth, I'd drop alpha. It is a fairly big price hike for a fairly small essence drop when you still have over half your essence left over. That frees you up to get plenty of other things to help out. Platelet factory and trauma damper come to mind to increase survivability. Maybe some dermal sheathing (remember, cyber is half essence cost when you have more bio than cyber) to pick up your armor a few more point.
E, pump at least one of your skills up to 6, or two to 5. Skills are a better deal to get them high with BP, so you may as well take advantage of that. Survival and Navigation is another one of those that you could convert into a skill group.
F, try and avoid skills at 1 or 2 when possible, they are a horrid karma:BP ratio for you.
Oh, nearly forgot, grab improved range finding (mod) for your guns. Combined with hawkeye it makes sure you'll almost never have to worry about range penalties. Even max range with no aiming is only a -2, and long and below is no penalty.

Okay, that's all I can think of off hand.

Thanks for the input heres the changes


Attributes

Body = 7 (8 ) (I made a error on that first time round the bonus is from the superthyroid gland only)
Agility = 5 (8 )
Reaction = 5 (8 )
Strength 5 (8 )
Charisma = 3
Intuition = 4
Logic = 2
Willpower = 3
Edge = 3


Skills (Active)

Blades 4 Swords specialised
Longarms 5 Shotguns specialised
Unarmed 2
Infiltration 5 Urban specialised
Influence Group 2
Electronics group 1
Outdoors group 1
Intimidation 2
Dodge 4
Pilot Ground Craft 4
Thrown Weapons 1
Perception 4 (free as per house rule)

Bioware
Bone Density R2 Ess 0.54 Cost 40000
Enhanced Articulation Ess 0.27 Cost 40000
Muscle Augmentation R2 Ess 0.36 Cost 14000
Muscle Toner R2 Ess 0.36 Cost 16000
Superthyroid Gland Ess 0.63 Cost 45000
Synaptic Booster R2 Ess 0.9 Cost 160000
Orthskin R3 Ess 0.675 Cost 90000

Thanks again for the help

From a pure min/max point of view, you should drop a point of Strength and get maybe another point of edge.

After all, Unarmed Combat and Blades damage stays the same with Str 7 and you don't have a single skill that uses Strength as attribute.

-CJ