Just a bad idea.

Edited for lack of further relevance.

Nah, SLJames is right, this was a bad idea brought on by a chain of bad ideas.

sounds like AH is a bit... frustrated heh...

wow, where is it ?

For what it's worth, I thought it was cool.

well, i´ve saved a copy in notepad, so i can blackmail AH when the opportunity arises

AH should know better than to start his Horror Movie Weekend early. I concur with SL James that this was both inappropriate and poorly done...although I appreciate the ego rub, I think I need some sleep.

Ego rub? You tease.

Auh, I missed one of AHs wonderfull stories? Bummer

Please, will ri. You must send the document out to us!

Please, oh please!

First, you got to score 4 or more successes in an Etiquette 8 test.

Then if he does attempt to send you the doc, the following will be posted on Dumpshock:

It wasn't snuff porn, quite frankly. It was far to tame to be considered such. If it were in a movie it would earn a PG-13 rating, perhaps an R, depending on the rater's prejudices. Perhaps I am a bit jaded, but it lacked the emotional impact of actual snuf porn.

The concept of a surviving conjoined twin acting as the ghost chain for a sibling that died as a result of seperation surgery has quite a bit of promise. I would dare say that it is brilliant in its uniqueness and its plausibility.

The sexual degredation is more suited to a Scarlet Woman story. In fact, I first assumed the victim to be a prospective Scarlet Woman when I began reading the story.
However, if one assumes that the magician is acting as a proxy for his dead sibling's essence drain power then it isn't at all misplaced. (I'm not sure if the spectre actually has essence drain but it seemed that way from the test. Of course, the pseudo-possession works better for an astral-only apparition.) It also invokes images of homosexual twin ghost incest without actually implying such. That's always good.

Likewise, equating astral links with love does make sense for such a warped psyche considering that it was his astral link with his brother that kept the child in this world. Murder as an acct of love isn't out of place for one who is so intimately connected with the dead, either. In fact, when I read the story I got an impression of Libra surrounded by the still loyal ghosts of his brainwashed victims.

The symbolic linking is the only thing that I found incongurant to the story. Libra's acts in this story are deeply personal, but long-distance assasination for hire seems deeply impersonal. I usderstand that this is simply a result of my fleshbound percepts and that to Libra it is the astral connection that matters, not the physical proximity. That only leaves the for hire part of the incongruency. While it is rarely a good idea to mix business and personal matters, some people do. I suppose it works for Libra. However, I wouldn't describe such a deeply personal sacrifice as simple blood magic to recduce drain. It would have to be much more powerful than that. Not quite GGD powerful, but certainly major mojo.

I'm not ego stroking when I sya that I'll make every attempt to steal this charcter.

so what are you stroking?

Now I'm bummed that I can't read the story.

#^*@)^*@)!!!!!

ME wants REAAAD!

I for one salute your attitude! *bows*

How about I offer not to send ten large guys 'round to find the file and extract it along with the rest of your headware memory?


C'mon, AH. Post it again!

err ya, for some reason i thought he had typed 6^10 million, which woulda been 60,000,000,000, which woulda been 60...BILLLIIIIOOOON... as appose to 10^6 which is 10,000,000, which is 10 MILLLLION....

I am dissapointed to have missed it, but I understand hating something you've posted...you know it just isn't what you wanted. But don't give up on it. Put it aside, tweek it, and have another go. It sounds (from comments I've read) that it is a good concept, just one in need of a little work.

i think i realized what i did wrong... i did 10X10^6, didnt i?

ok, math class over everyone

Well, i wouldn´t work for a Johnson who´s not able to do such basic math, anyway

I actually used to 10^6 notation because i happen to be a mathematician. (will be getting my master deg. around Nov 2006). Sorry for the inconvenience :-/