Edit: Putting a new character in here soon.

I will only comment on the Flaws.

They are kind of a cop out because magic using characters rarely use simsense or are jacked into something . Sensitive system especially. Your a shaman, and you probably won't get any bio or cyberware so in essence you are giving your self points without accounting for them.

My two nuyen.

so how would you change this? what would you replace the edges and flaws with?

I wouldn't worry too much. I hear J's games are lethal, you'll need every twink point you get with a Moon shaman.

twink point?

he made that character in question and i told him i didnt want a character so bent into nature so he said hell fix it. havent heard from him yet though.

yeah, I would only have a problem with the edges /flaws myself, since they seem like they are flaws taken which will hardly if ever come into play. I'd change them to flaws that are more likely to be flaws to the character, not just something they wouldn't do anyway. but if the GM wrote it up, that changes everything.

I'd jack up heal, iirc the number of boxes you can heal is based off the force of the spell. Maybe change out biotech for negotiation? You'll probably want some athletics as well.

kagetenshi made it thinking i wanted a nature thing cuase i mentioned somthing that was suggested to me by someone else about some form of secret garden.....

Twink - as in to twink out a character to make the most of edges/flaws/rules/min-maxing, to ultimately create a starting character that may not make sense in a story, but can make the most of rolling lots of dice and capitalizing on bending rules to make your character more powerful than they should be. Its technically fine, but you'll have troubled sleep at night as you try to justify your share of the karma.

heh. j/k

meh i think me wanting to make a witch was damn stupid now.
I prefer playing hermatics to shamans and all witchs are are mages with a diffent theme. Who really cares...well i dont anymore.

will post my own character here soon. all i need to do is make a mage how hard can it be?
oh well you guys hopefully are willing to help me fix it if its broken

I think the Allergy is a cool one and goes well with the theme of the character. Sensitive System is fine too, cause you never know when you'll get something installed. I rarely play magic users that don't have at least a datajack.

The simsense flaws are a cop-out though... Come up with a background for the character and work flaws into the story of the character.

nooooooooooooooooooo cause i aint making a witch mage

what does that have to do with it? my point is that every character you make should have a background story and a good personality. work your edges and flaws into what fits with the character, not what gives you the most points. eventually you'll be able to do both.

Fact: I made Kitsune, my first character, before I even had a single book. It was mostly a very confused Ariel deciding "I want an Otaku!" and Jon walking me through each step of the process. Using the Priority System.
The stats quite frankly sucked. I didn't even really understand them... but I had a good grasp of the character, and managed to play her.
Now I've been playing Kitsune for what... a year?
Recently, Jon (Kagetenshi. SotSW GM) let me re-do the character with the points system and my much-improved grasp of the game and the rules. Now, I'm pretty satisfied.

Moral? If you have a good GM, the stats don't matter near as much as how you play it.

thankyou for the advice i found that very good thanks K1tsune

edit: what is kitsune?

please i'd like that

I suppose it depends on the game you're in and how the GM runs it but from where I stand the complete lack of knowledge skills is a problem. Surely she knows something about something? KS: Magic or Spirits or Critters, something.

I'd definitely bring up that heal.


Kong

Pretty good build actually, just like something one of my players would build. Yes, they are properly trained. Besides, having no/very limited access to cyber is definately going to bite you in the ass sometime, like when the guy without Sensitive System goes Smartlink 2 (Delta), Boosted Reflexes (Delta), and Synaptic Accel or some other goodie combo. You can only drool.

I would like to see some Knowledge skills though. BTW, good job on the Int 6, now you have 30 points to spend on KS.

You might want to drop that Hot Patato and Heal for some other spell. Afterall, you already have Biotech 6. Maybe go for a Armour and Spell Shield.

I'm making my own character from scratch without help then i will post it here for people to look at and comment on.

i know i can make somthing on my own whether its good or not is another thing.

Probably the best option. I find that it's often difficult to get into a character you didn't make yourself unless you just click with the character, and that isn't that common.

~J

yeah i'm wondering whether you can make a character thats say a "Pitfighter"

Na mate na, just isn't gona happen.

If you're thinking about a pit-fighter type character (by which I am assuming you mean someone who fights in quasi-legal mixed martial arts tournaments or street fights), then you either want someone heavily cybered or an adept. Also, trolls are the best for it, although being naturally tilted towards certain skill sets makes them limited in other ways. Orks and dwarves are also good. All three can start out with higher Body and Strength, before you even start adding powers and enhancements.

An adept is really the best way to go, because for melee combat, you are comparing your successes with your opponent's. Initiative is not very important to a melee character. You can attack someone and take damage, or they can attack you and wind up taking damage. Adepts have the Improved Ability power, which lets them get up to 6 extra dice in certain skills. If you are rolling 6 more dice than someone else, then they can be tougher and capable of doing more damage, and they will still lose. Adepts also have access to powers such as Killing Hands (making their fists lethal weapons that can even affect spirits) or Mystic Armor (giving them natural impact armor).

Cybered characters are not as good at this - they make great generalists, but are not as good at single specialized roles. But you can still make a passable pit-fighter. Take Dermal Sheath: 3 and Ceramic Bone Lacing, and you have someone who does more damage with his fists, has +4 Body, and has 4 extra points of Impact armor. You can add things like a shock hand (to do electrical stun damage in addition to a punch), or Muscle Replacement to make you punches hit harder and to boost your Combat Pool. If your GM allows bioware, you can get enhanced articulation and a reflex recorder to add more combat dice, and muscle toner/augmentation or a suprathyroid gland to make yourself tougher. There are lot of little cyber-goodies a cybered pit fighter could take.


If you do make a pit fighter, though, make sure he's not too specialized. Give him at least one ranged skill, and be sure you have the basic skills (stealth, etiquette, athletics).

And counter strike is an awesome combo with a high unarmed combat skill. Max out on counter strike and goad people into attacking you. Give yourself a moderate killing hands and you've got a punch that'll sting for days.

Allow me to say once again that (don't click, players-mine)