QUOTE (Moon-Hawk @ Mar 27 2007, 04:04 PM) |
I think a good story has as at least as much, if not more, to do with who's telling the story than the actual content. A good storyteller can make a trip to buy bread sound exciting. A poor storyteller can make anything dull. |
QUOTE (nezumi) |
Might I recommend some good editing. In the first story alone I've found: |
QUOTE (fistandantilus3.0) | ||
My apologies, those are my fault. I hadn't really thought about clarity at the time, just blathering out a story really. I suppose my way of thinking was more like relating an old game story to a group of buddies while hang out rather than acutally submitting something. I didn't bother to spell check, or even read it over. Laziness on my part. So don't slam knasser. I'll take some time to go back over my own submissions and try to clarify and clean up a bit of the mess. |
QUOTE (Kagetenshi) |
You can always grab the source and edit that. Make sure you fix incorrect use of the <b> and <i> tags, as well ![]() ~J, intarwebs national socialist Edit: looks like the only transgression on that page isn't yours, so you're in the clear. |
QUOTE (Kagetenshi) |
It was actually an <i>: "if your GM or players are this bad…". It's not invalid, but it's semantically incorrect—you should be using <em>, or <strong> if you want even more emphasis. For validity, this could help. ~J |
QUOTE (Kagetenshi) |
Edit: not that I consider it incorrect as such, but do note that the old, ugly error message still shows up when a negative number is used as the clue number. ~J |
QUOTE (Kagetenshi @ Mar 28 2007, 08:54 PM) |
Close, very close. Your last challenge: you must take the margin and padding from my hand. ~J |