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A follow-up to the Artifacts plot, which was just a giant ruse, this writeup details the buildup and climax of Harlequin's revenge on Ghostwalker. Seems Harles really didn't pull any stops - an all-elf gang is wiped out because he apparently made a pact with his worse self, the Jester Spirit (kudos for the writer if that indeed is a shout-out). On top of that, Zebulon seems to convince Ghostwalker to act even more like a giant, pale dick than he usually does, like arrest Perianwyr over a crime that he made retroactively a crime - summoning spirits. Anything to please the lady, I guess. This book makes me seriously question draconic intelligence.
Anyway, Harles then starts an asymmetrical war in the city using the Vory, the Zombies and Fronts gangs (both massively buffed by loot from the all-elf Godz, and the Jester Spirit), something he already did in Tir Tairngire to, basically, kick Ehran in the nuts. Just how many people died in the Elf civil war? Probably more than a few ZDF troopers, and yet, Frosty is absolutely shocked Harlequin would do something as horrible as using IEDs on soldiers and then shoot the survivors. Because it's not like he didn't do that already and she was cheering over it. Widely out of character again. Maybe CGL should set up an internal guide on how these characters work.
Aftter a few shenanigans, we get to the final showdown, which is basically Harley making people dress up in V for Vendetta fatigues and doing V for Vendetta showdowny things. This actually meshes reasonably well with pop culture quote freak Harles, but then he and Ghostwalker (who all of a sudden asks people to go away before they're hurt, several times - what is the MATTER with you, Ghosty?) - and then proceed to summon Godzilla-sized spirits and lob them at each other because... well, reasons, I suppose. In the end, Frosty and Ehran intervene, and talk Harley down, who has Ghostwalker on the brink of being slain, with only a few HP left (he even looks battered, it's the high damage image), while Harley developed Superman invincibility somehow, but maybe he was channeling Jester Spirit. Then, Harley is all "oh my god what have I done, precious soldiers are dead!" and now wants to make everything right.
Then, suddenly, Aztlan. Sneak attack +4! Aztlan conquers half the PCC sector because they rolled stealth really well. Nobody cares because fortunately, the first treaty of Denver is void and nobody gives a fuck about the second, because they only signed it. International treaties are there for the US UCAS and friends to be ignored after all! So when Colloton visits, she just declares the treaty void because she doesn't like it, like the UCAS was the US and not a fraction of a former superpower more on par with modern Britain, bitterly reminiscing its once great power while the country slowly falls apart. Ghostwalker, mysteriously, withdraws into his hoard (not horde) to sulk, says something about how everyone who wronged him will see what that gets them in the far future, and ignores everyone walking all over his little fiefdom. What. Oh yeah, and some runners bust out Perianwyr. I'd say bad things about that handwave, but it seems there's a missions book built around that, so I'll just nod and wait for that book.
This chapter is ... mediocre. It's written well enough and works when taken at face value, though it ends on a far more DragonballZ-ish note than I like (but that seems Shadowrun's direction by now, in general). I am left wondering what the hell happened to Ghostwalker. Maybe this is another plot thread, though, so I guess I'll wait and see. Season 4 Missions was supposed to be in Denver, right? No sure how I like this, it has its ups and down. I'm not even mentioning bad editing anymore, just imagine it is added to every chapter review; it is not as bad as in Tirump [sic!] of Aztlan though.
The Aztlan part leaves me baffled, however. That was unnecessary and makes no sense AT ALL. Aztlan won their war and Sirrurg. That really was enough to make them a threat. Besides, where the hell did that third army come from? They spent their army twice already!
Hi Hermit, I wrote the Lightning In Denver chapter. I just want to say, thanks for the feedback, while I don't agree with some of what you said, and in other cases, I think you need to look closer (of course, things getting missed/misinterpreted left and right is par for the course with SR fiction, where muddying the waters is half of the job). Nonetheless I try really hard to be receptive to criticism.
* " a crime that he made retroactively a crime - summoning spirits"
It is not |retroactively| a crime. It's also pretty transparently a paper-thin excuse for seizing Perianwyr as a political prisoner.
* "the Jester Spirit (kudos for the writer if that indeed is a shout-out)"
Of course it is. The SNES game is what brought me into the fandom (I'm dating myself here!).
* Re: Harlequin and Frosty participating in the Tir Tairngire civil war to dickpunch Ehran. Book and page references, please? If I overlooked that, that was a serious error on my part, but I don't personally recall that ever happening. (I actually do a huge amount of research for everything SR I write, but with such an enormous pre-existing canon, it's easy to miss things no matter how rigorously you attempt to scour existing text.)
* "[Ghostwalker] all of a sudden asks people to go away before they're hurt, several times - what is the MATTER with you, Ghosty?"
It is just possible that this, Ghostwalker's "change of heart", and "Zebulon seems to convince Ghostwalker to act even more like a giant, pale dick than he usually does", are related phenomenon, and both of them are a bit more complicated and nuanced than you're giving them credit for. If reading this chapter gave you the impression that Ghostwalker was behaving somewhat differently than previously characterized...that is exactly the impression it meant to convey. Static characters, by and large, are boring. As you say... "I am left wondering what the hell happened to Ghostwalker." This is also rather intentional.
Anyway, thank you again for the feedback, I hope that didn't come off as overly argumentative or defensive; it is never easy to read a borderline scathing review of your work, and I've definitely struggled in the past with the (self-destructive) urge to defend my creative choices: for a writer, defending your creative choices is a losing prospect by default.
Oh, for the people saying that the events of Storm Front are too high-profile/high power to involve your PCs, I think at least in the case of Lightning In Denver I wrote some plot-hooks/adventure seeds with getting medium/low level PCs involved firmly in my mind. At least I tried. There is a lot of stuff for runners to do during the siege of Denver, and close to none of it directly involves Ghostwalker or Harlequin directly, just low-level functionaries and indirectly-controlled pawns on both sides.